#151 Update Parental Controls page as per CR feedback

1 files changed, 31 insertions, 48 deletions

diff --git a/gnome-help/C/parental-controls.page b/gnome-help/C/parental-controls.page
index e301606f..6f487604 100644
--- a/gnome-help/C/parental-controls.page
+++ b/gnome-help/C/parental-controls.page
@@ -6,30 +6,12 @@
   <info>
     <link type="guide" xref="user-accounts#manage"/>
 
-    <revision pkgversion="3.18" date="2015-09-28" status="final"/>
-    <revision version="gnome:42" status="final" date="2022-04-02"/>
     <revision version="gnome:43" status="final" date="2022-12-13"/>
 
     <credit type="author">
-      <name>GNOME Documentation Project</name>
-      <email>gnome-doc-list@gnome.org</email>
-    </credit>
-    <credit type="author">
       <name>Anthony McGlone</name>
       <email>anthonymcglone2022@gmail.com</email>
     </credit>
-    <credit type="editor">
-      <name>Shaun McCance</name>
-      <email>shaunm@gnome.org</email>
-    </credit>
-    <credit type="editor">
-      <name>Michael Hill</name>
-      <email>mdhillca@gmail.com</email>
-    </credit>
-    <credit type="editor">
-      <name>Ekaterina Gerasimova</name>
-      <email>kittykat3756@gmail.com</email>
-    </credit>
 
     <include href="legal.xml" xmlns="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude"/>
 
@@ -38,30 +20,31 @@
 
   <title>Add parental controls</title>
 
-  <p>Parental controls can be applied to a user to:</p>
+  <p>Parents can use the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> application to prevent children from accessing harmful content.</p>
+
+  <p>An administrator can use this application to:</p>
 
   <list>
     <item>
-      <p>Restrict their access to web browsers and applications.</p>
+      <p>Restrict a user's access to web browsers and applications.</p>
     </item>
     <item>
-      <p>Prevent them from installing applications.</p>
+      <p>Prevent a user from installing applications.</p>
     </item>
     <item>
-      <p>Allow them to only access age-appropriate applications.</p>
+      <p>Allow a user to only access age-appropriate applications.</p>
     </item>
   </list>
 
   <note>
     <p>
-      The Parental Controls application (Malcontent) requires 
-      applications to be installed via flatpak or Flathub.
+      <gui>Parental Controls</gui> requires applications to be installed via Flatpak or Flathub.
     </p>
   </note> 
 
   <section id="restrictwebbrowsers">
     <title>Restrict web browsers</title>
-    <p>Parental Controls allows an administrator to disable browser access for a user.</p>
+    <p><gui>Parental Controls</gui> allows an administrator to disable browser access for a user.</p>
     <steps>
       <item>
         <p>Open the <gui xref="shell-introduction#activities">Activities</gui>
@@ -70,15 +53,15 @@
       </item>
       <item>
         <p>
-          Click on <gui>Users</gui> to open the panel.
+          Select <gui>Users</gui> to open the panel.
         </p>
       </item>
       <item>
-         <p>Under <gui>Other Users</gui>, click on the user to whom you wish to apply the controls.
+         <p>Under <gui>Other Users</gui>, select the user to whom you wish to apply the controls.
          </p>
       </item>
       <item>
-         <p>Click on the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> tab.
+         <p>Select the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> tab.
          </p>
          <note>
            <p>The tab only appears if <gui>Parental Controls</gui> is installed and enabled.
@@ -87,12 +70,12 @@
       </item>
       <item>
         <p>
-          Click <gui>Unlock</gui> on the <gui>Permission Required</gui> dialog.
+          Press <gui>Unlock</gui> in the <gui>Permission Required</gui> dialog.
         </p>
       </item>
        <item>
         <p>
-          Input your password and authenticate to unlock the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> dialog. 
+          Enter your password and authenticate to unlock the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> dialog.
         </p>
       </item>
       <item>
@@ -104,10 +87,10 @@
   </section>
   <section id="restrictapplications">
     <title>Restrict applications</title>
-    <p>Parental Controls provides a list of applications that an administrator can disable.</p>
+    <p><gui>Parental Controls</gui> provides a list of applications that an administrator can disable.</p>
     <note>
       <p>
-        Existing applications (which are not installed via flatpak) will not appear in this list.
+        Existing applications (which are not installed via Flatpak) will not appear in this list.
       </p>
     </note>
     <steps>
@@ -118,15 +101,15 @@
       </item>
       <item>
         <p>
-          Click on <gui>Users</gui> to open the panel.
+          Select <gui>Users</gui> to open the panel.
         </p>
       </item>
       <item>
-         <p>Under <gui>Other Users</gui>, click on the user to whom you wish to apply the controls.
+         <p>Under <gui>Other Users</gui>, select the user to whom you wish to apply the controls.
          </p>
       </item>
       <item>
-         <p>Click on the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> tab.
+         <p>Select the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> tab.
          </p>
          <note>
            <p>The tab only appears if <gui>Parental Controls</gui> is installed and enabled.
@@ -135,12 +118,12 @@
       </item>
       <item>
         <p>
-          Click <gui>Unlock</gui> on the <gui>Permission Required</gui> dialog.
+          Press <gui>Unlock</gui> in the <gui>Permission Required</gui> dialog.
         </p>
       </item>
        <item>
         <p>
-          Input your password and authenticate to unlock the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> dialog. 
+          Enter your password and authenticate to unlock the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> dialog.
         </p>
       </item>
       <item>
@@ -157,7 +140,7 @@
   </section>
   <section id="restrictapplicationinstallation">
     <title>Restrict application installation</title>
-    <p>Parental Controls allows an administrator to deny installation privileges to a user.</p>  
+    <p><gui>Parental Controls</gui> allows an administrator to deny installation privileges to a user.</p>
     <steps>
       <item>
         <p>Open the <gui xref="shell-introduction#activities">Activities</gui>
@@ -166,15 +149,15 @@
       </item>
       <item>
         <p>
-          Click on <gui>Users</gui> to open the panel.
+          Select <gui>Users</gui> to open the panel.
         </p>
       </item>
       <item>
-         <p>Under <gui>Other Users</gui>, click on the user to whom you wish to apply the controls.
+         <p>Under <gui>Other Users</gui>, select the user to whom you wish to apply the controls.
          </p>
       </item>
       <item>
-         <p>Click on the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> tab.
+         <p>Select the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> tab.
          </p>
          <note>
            <p>The tab only appears if <gui>Parental Controls</gui> is installed and enabled.
@@ -183,12 +166,12 @@
       </item>
       <item>
         <p>
-          Click <gui>Unlock</gui> on the <gui>Permission Required</gui> dialog.
+          Press <gui>Unlock</gui> in the <gui>Permission Required</gui> dialog.
         </p>
       </item>
        <item>
         <p>
-          Input your password and authenticate to unlock the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> dialog. 
+          Enter your password and authenticate to unlock the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> dialog.
         </p>
       </item>
       <item>
@@ -211,15 +194,15 @@
       </item>
       <item>
         <p>
-          Click on <gui>Users</gui> to open the panel.
+          Select <gui>Users</gui> to open the panel.
         </p>
       </item>
       <item>
-         <p>Under <gui>Other Users</gui>, click on the user to whom you wish to apply the controls.
+         <p>Under <gui>Other Users</gui>, select the user to whom you wish to apply the controls.
          </p>
       </item>
       <item>
-         <p>Click on the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> tab.
+         <p>Select the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> tab.
          </p>
          <note>
            <p>The tab only appears if <gui>Parental Controls</gui> is installed and enabled.
@@ -228,12 +211,12 @@
       </item>
       <item>
         <p>
-          Click <gui>Unlock</gui> on the <gui>Permission Required</gui> dialog.
+          Press <gui>Unlock</gui> in the <gui>Permission Required</gui> dialog.
         </p>
       </item>
        <item>
         <p>
-          Input your password and authenticate to unlock the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> dialog. 
+          Enter your password and authenticate to unlock the <gui>Parental Controls</gui> dialog.
         </p>
       </item>
       <item>