improve and tighten wording of about box

1 files changed, 15 insertions, 14 deletions

diff --git a/gnome-version.xml.in.in b/gnome-version.xml.in.in
index 78425190..f46e8d11 100644
--- a/gnome-version.xml.in.in
+++ b/gnome-version.xml.in.in
@@ -9,21 +9,22 @@
     <!-- NOTE TO AUTHORS: Do not put anything in the following paragraphs that
     will be substituted by the configure script. Otherwise you will break
     the translations. -->
-    <_p>Welcome to the GNOME Desktop. GNOME is a Free, usable, powerful,
-accessible desktop environment for the Unix-like family of operating
-systems.</_p>
-    <_p>GNOME includes most of what you see on your computer, including the
-file manager, menus, and many applications, like the web browser. GNOME also
-includes a development platform to allow programmers to create complex and
-powerful new applications.</_p>
-    <_p>GNOME is developed by an active community of volunteers who want to
-provide a desktop and a suite of user friendly applications. Because GNOME
-needs documentors, translators, and many other types of people, virtually
-anyone, with or without coding skills, can contribute to GNOME.</_p>
+    <_p>GNOME is a Free, usable, stable, accessible desktop
+environment for the Unix-like family of operating systems.</_p>
+    <_p>GNOME includes most of what you see on your computer,
+including the file manager, web browser, menus, and many
+applications.</_p>
+    <_p>GNOME also includes a complete development platform for
+applications programmers, allowing the creation of powerful and
+complex applications.</_p>
+    <_p>GNOME's focus on usability and accessibility, regular release
+cycle, and strong corporate backing make it unique among Free Software
+desktops.</_p>
+    <_p>GNOME's greatest strength is our strong community. Virtually
+anyone, with or without coding skills, can contribute to making GNOME
+better.</_p>
     <_p>Hundreds of people have contributed code to GNOME since it was started
 in 1997; many more have contributed in other important ways, including
-translations, documentation, and quality assurance. The following names are an
-incomplete list of those who have contributed substantially and made GNOME
-possible.</_p>
+translations, documentation, and quality assurance.</_p>
   </description>
 </gnome-version>